[atrt2] Corrections to Final Report
alan.greenberg at mcgill.ca
Sun Dec 22 19:44:13 UTC 2013
Attached is the most recent version I received. Previous changes to
Recommendation 7 (page 46) and the entire Section 13 (pages 63-69)
were accepted and my changes then added.
The changes are:
- Rec 7 now has to somewhat unrelated sections, so I applied
numbering to the paragraphs.
- Changing capitalization in Rec 7 and omitting an extraneous word.
- The body of Section 13 still referred specifically to the PDP even
though the recommendations were now more generalized. I changed the
added a sentence to the lead paragraph of Section 13 to address this.
- Bullets were missing to the summary of original community input.
- Adding a missing S in 10.1-b
I have NOT made the corresponding changes to the Executive Summary.
Two changes throughout the document that I have NOT made but highly recommend:
- We interchangeably use "public comment" and "Public Comment". I
suggest the latter.
- The section title "Public Comment on Draft Recommendations" has had
the "Draft" deleted, presumably because we are no longer including
the text of the draft Recs. This results in some confusion as to
whether these comments are in fact to the Recs that follow. I suggest
we re-instate the word Draft, and perhaps and a line just under the
title pointing to where the draft report can be found.
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