[CWG-DT-Stewardship] For your review - Charter Template

[Burr, Becky]

Apologies for my late input.  I have attached a fairly substantial mark-up of the charter.  Given the largely technical nature of the IANA functions and the fact that hard policy questions related to TLDs are addressed in another environment (I.e., the GNSO or the ccNSO), I think we should strive for consensus.  I also tried to clarify the role of subgroups and the process of review by chartering organizations.

It’s easier to read if you turn off the markup view.


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From: Julie Hammer <julie.hammer at bigpond.com<mailto:julie.hammer at bigpond.com>>
Date: Saturday, July 19, 2014 at 9:01 PM
To: "CWG-DT-Stewardship at icann.org<mailto:CWG-DT-Stewardship at icann.org>" <CWG-DT-Stewardship at icann.org<mailto:CWG-DT-Stewardship at icann.org>>
Subject: Re: [CWG-DT-Stewardship] For your review - Charter Template

Apologies to those who receive this email twice.  I assume all names are on the group list but not 100% sure.

Apologies too for not being able to spend time on this sooner.

A couple of additional points from me.

1. I note that the Charter Template abbreviates the term "Cross Community Working Group" to "CWG", but in our text, we are calling it "ccWG".   I suggest that we standardise on one or the other, not sure which.  In my amendments, I have continued using "ccWG"  in the text.
2. I have done a few suggested formatting changes aiming to improve the flow and readability of the document.
3. I have added words to try to pick up on Avri's point about the Charter not precluding comment on IANA Functions 1 and 10 should the ccWG deem that appropriate.
4. In the section titled 'Deliverables', I have tentatively added another step at No3:
"Development of a clear process and timeline for communicating the Community proposal to participating chartering organizations and obtaining their endorsement"
However, I say tentatively because I'm not sure whether this is the appropriate.

Updated document attached.

Cheers,  Julie



On 18 Jul 2014, at 8:03 am, Reed, Daniel A <dan-reed at uiowa.edu<https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v1/url?u=http://mailto:dan-reed%40uiowa.edu&k=lQ50IrZ4n2wmPbDBDzKBYw%3D%3D%0A&r=1J%2BU11wfJSXOLgU2NzyyPtxJzuvGV4bYQHowOGDBoZw%3D%0A&m=eEd%2FpM3s%2FyzgE3i6WkmJcBqBviP0XG6z1Kgw6Zng9JI%3D%0A&s=32fbe6a520d36b637799f839c16a0f195a51c55eb8e92487dca45482b3d3d038>> wrote:

Just a couple of quick edits:

1.       I would replace Steve Crocker’s name with the “Steve Crocker, current chair of the ICANN Board of Directors”
2.       I agree that it would be best to put the consultation process in this document, as that will give people the earliest indication of how to be involved and heard

Dan

From: cwg-dt-stewardship-bounces at icann.org<mailto:cwg-dt-stewardship-bounces at icann.org> [mailto:cwg-dt-stewardship-bounces at icann.org] On Behalf Of Allan MacGillivray
Sent: Thursday, July 17, 2014 2:33 PM
To: Duchesneau, Stephanie; 'Gomes, Chuck'; Marika Konings; CWG-DT-Stewardship at icann.org<mailto:CWG-DT-Stewardship at icann.org>
Subject: Re: [CWG-DT-Stewardship] For your review - Charter Template

Stephanie et al. – great suggestions.  I have made a few edits and  comments on your version.

Allan


From: Duchesneau, Stephanie [mailto:Stephanie.Duchesneau at neustar.us]
Sent: July-17-14 10:05 AM
To: 'Gomes, Chuck'; Allan MacGillivray; Marika Konings; CWG-DT-Stewardship at icann.org<mailto:CWG-DT-Stewardship at icann.org>
Subject: RE: For your review - Charter Template

Allan and Marika, thanks for kicking this off. I have added some information based upon the call and the past charter to this additional draft and made some comments to be considered by the Drafting Team going forward.

Stephanie


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Subject: Re: [CWG-DT-Stewardship] For your review - Charter Template

Thanks very much for doing this Allan.  I inserted some comments and suggested a few edits that are highlighted in the attached file for DT consideration.

Chuck

From: cwg-dt-stewardship-bounces at icann.org<mailto:cwg-dt-stewardship-bounces at icann.org> [mailto:cwg-dt-stewardship-bounces at icann.org] On Behalf Of Allan MacGillivray
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Subject: Re: [CWG-DT-Stewardship] For your review - Charter Template

Dear All,

I developed some text around problem statement, goals and objectives as well as scope which I have included in Marika’s draft.  Rather than including a number of options on these important issues, I tried to be as specific as possible on what I think the important issues are in the hope of provoking an early discussion on these key aspects.  The text references an Annex listing the IANA functions, which is based on the actual IANA/NTIA contract, as summarized by Becky.  I am including this as a separate attachment.  We can talk about this on Monday but if there are any questions of clarification or comment before then please ping me.

Allan


From: cwg-dt-stewardship-bounces at icann.org<mailto:cwg-dt-stewardship-bounces at icann.org> [mailto:cwg-dt-stewardship-bounces at icann.org]<mailto:[mailto:cwg-dt-stewardship-bounces at icann.org]> On Behalf Of Marika Konings
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Subject: [CWG-DT-Stewardship] For your review - Charter Template

Dear All,

Following our call on Monday, please find attached a first draft of the charter template for your review. Please note that Allan volunteered to provide some draft language for the first three sections (problem statement, goals & objectives, scope) which we'll insert as soon as available. However, to already allow you some time to review some of the other sections which, as discussed, have been populated with language from the initial draft as well as the charter of the Cross-Community Working Group on principles for CWGs, we already wanted to circulate this version now. Note that I've taken the liberty to insert some comments in areas where the DT will need to make some further determinations, provided there is support for the draft language provided. You are encouraged to share any comments / proposed edits you may have ahead of Monday's meeting.

Best regards,

Marika
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