[DT-F] Fwd: Revised section III.A.iii.a
David Conrad
david.conrad at icann.org
Wed Jun 3 00:56:43 UTC 2015
Hi,
See a few wordsmithing/consistency edits (on top of Chuck's which I agreed
with). None are particularly substantive (IMHO). I did suggest a way to
avoid the term 'major' in 2.a.v that would preclude the need for 2.a.vii,
but feel free to reject that edit.
Regards,
-drc
-----Original Message-----
From: <Gomes>, Chuck <cgomes at verisign.com>
Date: Wednesday, June 3, 2015 at 2:53 AM
To: Alan Greenberg <alan.greenberg at mcgill.ca>, CWG DT-F <cwg-dtf at icann.org>
Subject: Re: [DT-F] Fwd: Revised section III.A.iii.a
>My apologies for taking so long to respond but it has been an incredibly
>busy day. My suggested edits and some comments are highlighted in the
>attached file. I know time is short so please feel free to accept,
>reject or modify any edits or suggestions I made. I don't think any of
>them are showstoppers.
>
>Chuck
>
>-----Original Message-----
>From: cwg-dtf-bounces at icann.org [mailto:cwg-dtf-bounces at icann.org] On
>Behalf Of Alan Greenberg
>Sent: Tuesday, June 02, 2015 1:11 PM
>To: CWG DT-F
>Subject: [DT-F] Fwd: Revised section III.A.iii.a
>
>Comments PLEASE. This is a substantive revision from the previous version
>and we are under strong pressure to finalize the text for the CWG
>Proposal publication.
>
>Alan
>
>
>>Date: Tue, 02 Jun 2015 02:23:53 -0400
>>To: CWG DT-F <cwg-dtf at icann.org>
>>From: Alan Greenberg <alan.greenberg at mcgill.ca>
>>Subject: Revised section III.A.iii.a
>>
>>Attached is a revision of the DTF section (III.A.iii.a) of the CWG
>>proposal.
>>
>>In the previous version, that section and Annex N were at times
>>inconsistent or confusing. I have merged the two and Annex N is no
>>longer required. This has made for a longer section in the body of the
>>report, but given the timing and need for precision, there does not
>>seem to be a viable alternative.
>>
>>I believe that this incorporates all of the changes we have discussed
>>and addresses most of the issues raised in the public comment. In some
>>cases, as I was drafting this document, I altered how I responded to
>>the specific comments from what I and Chuck discussed in our earlier
>>e-mails, but I think the result still follows the intent.
>>
>>Alan
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