[DT-F] Fwd: Revised section III.A.iii.a

[Cheryl Langdon-Orr]

I'm fine with Chuck's edits...


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On 3 June 2015 at 09:53, Gomes, Chuck <cgomes at verisign.com> wrote:

> My apologies for taking so long to respond but it has been an incredibly
> busy day.  My suggested edits and some comments are highlighted in the
> attached file.  I know time is short so please feel free to accept, reject
> or modify any edits or suggestions I made.  I don't think any of them are
> showstoppers.
>
> Chuck
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: cwg-dtf-bounces at icann.org [mailto:cwg-dtf-bounces at icann.org] On
> Behalf Of Alan Greenberg
> Sent: Tuesday, June 02, 2015 1:11 PM
> To: CWG DT-F
> Subject: [DT-F] Fwd: Revised section III.A.iii.a
>
> Comments PLEASE. This is a substantive revision from the previous version
> and we are under strong pressure to finalize the text for the CWG Proposal
> publication.
>
> Alan
>
>
> >Date: Tue, 02 Jun 2015 02:23:53 -0400
> >To: CWG DT-F <cwg-dtf at icann.org>
> >From: Alan Greenberg <alan.greenberg at mcgill.ca>
> >Subject: Revised section III.A.iii.a
> >
> >Attached is a revision of the DTF section (III.A.iii.a) of the CWG
> proposal.
> >
> >In the previous version, that section and Annex N were at times
> >inconsistent or confusing. I have merged the two and Annex N is no
> >longer required. This has made for a longer section in the body of the
> >report, but given the timing and need for precision, there does not
> >seem to be a viable alternative.
> >
> >I believe that this incorporates all of the changes we have discussed
> >and addresses most of the issues raised in the public comment. In some
> >cases, as I was drafting this document, I altered how I responded to
> >the specific comments from what I and Chuck discussed in our earlier
> >e-mails, but I think the result still follows the intent.
> >
> >Alan
>
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