[DT-F] Fwd: Revised section III.A.iii.a

[Gomes, Chuck]

My apologies for taking so long to respond but it has been an incredibly busy day.  My suggested edits and some comments are highlighted in the attached file.  I know time is short so please feel free to accept, reject or modify any edits or suggestions I made.  I don't think any of them are showstoppers.

Chuck

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From: cwg-dtf-bounces at icann.org [mailto:cwg-dtf-bounces at icann.org] On Behalf Of Alan Greenberg
Sent: Tuesday, June 02, 2015 1:11 PM
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Subject: [DT-F] Fwd: Revised section III.A.iii.a

Comments PLEASE. This is a substantive revision from the previous version and we are under strong pressure to finalize the text for the CWG Proposal publication.

Alan


>Date: Tue, 02 Jun 2015 02:23:53 -0400
>To: CWG DT-F <cwg-dtf at icann.org>
>From: Alan Greenberg <alan.greenberg at mcgill.ca>
>Subject: Revised section III.A.iii.a
>
>Attached is a revision of the DTF section (III.A.iii.a) of the CWG proposal.
>
>In the previous version, that section and Annex N were at times 
>inconsistent or confusing. I have merged the two and Annex N is no 
>longer required. This has made for a longer section in the body of the 
>report, but given the timing and need for precision, there does not 
>seem to be a viable alternative.
>
>I believe that this incorporates all of the changes we have discussed 
>and addresses most of the issues raised in the public comment. In some 
>cases, as I was drafting this document, I altered how I responded to 
>the specific comments from what I and Chuck discussed in our earlier 
>e-mails, but I think the result still follows the intent.
>
>Alan
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