[Neobrahmigp] IP review of Gurmukhi LGR proposal v2.5

[Sarmad Hussain]

Dear Prof. Lehal, NBGP members,

IP has reviewed and shared their final feedback below and as attached.  They 
have suggested some editorial changes.

May we request you to please carefully review and incorporate the feedback and 
share the final version of the Gurmukhi LGR proposal.

Once you share the version:

1.	it will be published at the ICANN website as the final version of Gurmukhi 
LGR proposal from NBGP, after incorporating the public comments, and
2.	it will be submitted to IP for their formal review

These are the next steps towards approval and integration of the work into the 
RZ-LGR.

Regards

Sarmad

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To NeoB-GP (Gurmukhi)
>From IP



The IP has reviewed the post-public comment version of the Gurmukhi LGR and 
notes a few final editorial issues noted in the attached document and in the 
text below.


Some additional mechanical testing has been performed and no issues found.

The dispositions of comments have been reviewed; the IP feels that these 
should be formally published to provide a track record of the GP's processing 
of public comments, especially for comments that resulted in no change to the 
LGR.

As a result of this review, the IP is looking forward to the submission of a 
finalized Gurmukhi LGR proposal for formal review and approval as part of the 
integrated Root Zone LGR.




Document:

Editorial issues noted in attached document 
"Gurmukhi-LGR-20181206-IP-review.docx" (see change tracking and sidebar 
comments)

TXT file:

No issues

XML file:

(1) On line 138 in the XML file, the <dd> entry for [Proposal] contains no 
title or URL and date for the final published proposal document. We expect 
that this will be replaced by the actual data as part of publication.

(2) The "Overview" section (lines 12ff) contains the wrong document title. The 
correct title is "Proposal for a Gurmukhi Script Root Zone Label Generation 
Ruleset (LGR)"


(3) The section on variants (line 32ff) contains language that is cloned from 
Devanagari but does not apply to  the specifics of the Gurmukhi LGR, because 
unlike Devanagari, no in-script variants are defined, and therefore "deviation 
from normally perceived character formation" dos not apply. The following 
change is suggested.

Old:

    <p>According to Section 6, "Variants", in "[Proposal]", this LGR defines 
variants which are
    "Confusing due to deviation from normally perceived character formations 
by larger linguistic
    community". These cases are not of mere visual similarity; they can cause 
confusion even to a
    careful observer and hence have been defined as variants. In addition to 
these, NBGP also did
    cross-script variant analysis among all the scripts under NBGP ambit. 
Gurmukhi and Devanagari
    scripts are closely related to each other and there are many characters in 
both scripts, which
    can be confused with the  characters in other script.</p>

New (suggested):

    <p>The Gurmukhi and Devanagari scripts are closely related to each other 
and there are many
    code points in both scripts which  can be confused with code points in the 
other script. Additional
    cross-script variant analysis identified a smaller set of code points from 
the Bengali script. Where these
    can cause confusion even to a careful observer, they have been defined as 
variants. See Section 6,
    "Variants", in [Proposal].</p>



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