[RDS-WHOIS2-RT-Leadership_Staff] My full review

[Lisa Phifer]

All,

Based on a very quick scan of Alan's redlined changes (including 
comments), and focusing largely on items not marked "next version," 
here are my thoughts:

AG6 - I think it is too late to alter the text of the draft 
recommendation and retain consensus status, unless the change is of 
enough importance to hold off publication to allow for reconfirmation 
of consensus.

AG16 - Links do render in PDFs generated in Word, and are also 
repeated in full text in the bibliography. This can be a matter of 
personal preference for readers and the authors of each section.

AG17 - The RDS PDP WG did in fact start meeting in 2016!

AG19 - Substantive deletion that may be contentious to some? Is it 
imperative to delete now?

AG23 - I think Lili is saying that if a registrar is routinely 
failing to conduct validation and verification, then examining other 
records for the same registrar will likely show this to be a pattern.

3.10.6 - Sentence deleted from possible impacts is arguably 
substantive, is it imperative now?

Also, note that a few sections do not yet include impact of GDPR, per 
the agreement made at the F2F3 that's was an option for rapporteurs 
to include in the draft.

All other items not marked as "next version" seem to me (at least at 
first look) to be copy edits and easily addressed now, although we 
will have to provide that redline to the review team as FYI.

Best, Lisa



At 12:50 AM 8/30/2018, Alan Greenberg wrote:
>This took longer than I had hoped!
>
>About half of my comments are annotated "Next version". Even if they 
>look like they can be addressed quickly. DON'T BOTHER.
>
>The others are calling specific text into question. And I also made 
>a number of purely editorial changes. In the few cases where I 
>spotted a missing blank line between paragraphs, I added it PLUS put 
>in a comment so you wouldn't miss noticing it.
>
>Overall, I am in awe at the amount of work you folks (that is Lisa, 
>Alice and Jean-Baptiste) have put into this.
>
>Based on the number of spelling mistakes I have made in this memo, 
>it is time to get a bit of sleep.  Hope nothing I write in the 
>report is that bad!
>
>Talk to you in a few hours.
>
>Alan
>
>
>
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