[RDS-WHOIS2-WHOISPolicy] FW: [Ext] Re: Single WHOIS Policy Sub-Group Final Report - Draft

[Carlton Samuels]

Hi Alice:
Did not see Lisa's breakdown. Much thanks for bringing it to me.  I have
emended the draft and attach both redlined and clean copies here.

Best,
-Carlton

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*Carlton A Samuels*

*Mobile: 876-818-1799Strategy, Process, Governance, Assessment & Turnaround*
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On Mon, Jul 23, 2018 at 8:00 AM Alice Jansen <alice.jansen at icann.org> wrote:

> Hi Carlton,
>
> Hope this finds you well.
>
> Just making sure you have seen Lisa’s breakdown below.
> Let me know.
>
> Thanks!
>
> Best
>
> Alice
>
>
>
> *From: *Lisa Phifer <lisa at corecom.com>
> *Date: *Sunday 22 July 2018 at 21:20
> *To: *Carlton Samuels <carlton.samuels at gmail.com>, "
> rds-whois2-whoispolicy at icann.org" <rds-whois2-whoispolicy at icann.org>,
> Jean-Baptiste Deroulez <jean-baptiste.deroulez at icann.org>, Alice Jansen <
> alice.jansen at icann.org>, Alan Greenberg <alan.greenberg at mcgill.ca>
> *Subject: *[Ext] Re: Single WHOIS Policy Sub-Group Final Report - Draft
>
>
>
> Hi Carlton,
>
> As requested, I have repeated the gap assessment on your latest draft:
> https://community.icann.org/download/attachments/71604705/Single%20WHOIS%20Policy%20Subgroup%202%20Report%20%20-%20Draft%20%233%20CLEAN%20-%20July%2019%202018.docx
> [community.icann.org]
> <https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__community.icann.org_download_attachments_71604705_Single-2520WHOIS-2520Policy-2520Subgroup-25202-2520Report-2520-2520-2D-2520Draft-2520-25233-2520CLEAN-2520-2D-2520July-252019-25202018.docx&d=DwMFAw&c=FmY1u3PJp6wrcrwll3mSVzgfkbPSS6sJms7xcl4I5cM&r=hgoi2V8bykqXjZC9kZZRTDSEJ4lQIyKh6k8Q-TUv6Ks&m=1100ycyCslTWBqVdKhi5j2qdnwCmHMpQ_21CgX4GsMA&s=C1a8gPdfVb2a7vBqCNm3v0IoGXDeD5IqJniGXJLKeOc&e=>
>
> Here are the remaining gaps that I see:
>
> · Subsection 3 seems to be a more appropriate place for analysis provided
> in Subsection 4. Move analysis (that is, 4 questions and the subgroup’s
> answers) to Subsection 3.
>
> · Subsection 4 does not list problem(s) yet to be addressed (or clearly
> state there are no problems.) The analysis indicates work now underway and
> expectations for completing that work, but what if any are the problems and
> issues? (e.g., risks if planned work is not completed)
>
> · Subsection 5’s “Recommendation” does not appear to be a recommendation
> to the Board. Within the recommendation text, there is no problem stated,
> nor any Board action recommended to address that problem. While there is
> acknowledgement of on-going community efforts that may fully realize the
> intent of WHOIS1 Rec #2, what further specific, measurable Board action is
> recommended?
>
> You may also wish to address these comments on the prior draft:
>
> https://mm.icann.org/pipermail/rds-whois2-whoispolicy/attachments/20180720/ae991d80/attachment.html
>
> Best regards
> Lisa
>
>
> At 04:25 AM 7/20/2018, Carlton Samuels wrote:
>
> Dear Colleagues:
> Please see redline and clean reports intended as the final draft.  I have
> added content and following the guidance of the Report Gap Assessment Tool,
> made some other changes.
>
> Would appreciate if sub-group team members would feedback on whether we
> are good to go for content and overall intent.  it would be highly
> appreciated if Lisa would be so kind and feedback on the structural changes
> advised.
>
> Kind regards,
> -Carlton
>
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> *Carlton A Samuels*
>
> *Mobile: 876-818-1799 Strategy, Process, Governance, Assessment &
> Turnaround*
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>
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