[Wp4] Human Rights PC2 draft for CCWG comment

[Nigel Roberts]

I am very concerned at the examples for two reasons.

1. "will be committed to" has to be removed throughout, and replaced by 
"will respect"

2. Example 1 should be removed. It seems to imply that the Art 10 rights 
(free expression) are all that is involved without highlighting (for 
example) the right to privacy, or even more astounding, the right to 
property (including intellectaual property).

So I suggest we leave the example as

> Within its mission and in its operations, ICANN will respect internationally recognized fundamental human ri


Does that find agreement?



On 13/10/15 08:01, Greg Shatan wrote:
> All,
>
> Here is the completed, revised version of the Human Rights PC2 Analysis.  I
> look forward to talking with you soon.
>
> Note to members of WP4:  I cut the discussion of the two alternative
> formulations of the bylaw, which we essentially rejected, and each of which
> had very limited support in the public comments, but the full discussion
> remains in the Google Docs version so we can use it in another document.
>
> Note also that I went through the survey results carefully (twice) and came
> up with slightly different results than Leon, but nothing that changes the
> shape of the results too significantly.
>
> Greg
>
> On Mon, Oct 12, 2015 at 11:15 PM, León Felipe Sánchez Ambía <
> leonfelipe at sanchez.mx> wrote:
>
>> Dear all,
>>
>> I want to thank you all for the excellent work carried in this second
>> public comment analysis draft. Although I remained silent I followed the
>> discussion closely and tried to capture it in some minor additions I made
>> to this new version of our draft to be submitted to the CCWG for review.
>>
>> I specially thank Nigel, Niels, Tatiana, Greg, Avri, Ellen, Kavouss, David
>> and Mathew for their work and feedback to reach this document.
>>
>> I encourage you to please review this version which will be submitted as
>> our deliverable to the CCWG and I also remind you that should there be the
>> need to make any further adjustments, we can do so anytime before having to
>> submit a final version to be included in the next version of the CCWG’s
>> draft proposal.
>>
>> Attached is a word and PDF version of this latest draft.
>>
>> Best regards,
>>
>>
>>
>> León
>>
>>
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