[Wp4] Human Rights PC2 draft for CCWG comment

[Greg Shatan]

Nigel,

The examples are part of the verbatim quote from the second draft, so we
can't change them at this point.

Hopefully our next draft will be considerably more advanced than this.

We should try to understand what the point of the "will be committed to"
language was -- if there was a point.  Maybe someone can enlighten us.  It
might be an echo of language being imported from the Affirmation of
Commitments, but I don't recall if that's how it developed or what it was
supposed to do.

Greg

P.S. Thanks!

On Tue, Oct 13, 2015 at 3:43 AM, Nigel Roberts <nigel at channelisles.net>
wrote:

> PS: This is a great effort in drawing our sometimes diverse discussion
> together. Good job!
>
>
> On 13/10/15 08:01, Greg Shatan wrote:
>
>> All,
>>
>> Here is the completed, revised version of the Human Rights PC2 Analysis.
>> I
>> look forward to talking with you soon.
>>
>> Note to members of WP4:  I cut the discussion of the two alternative
>> formulations of the bylaw, which we essentially rejected, and each of
>> which
>> had very limited support in the public comments, but the full discussion
>> remains in the Google Docs version so we can use it in another document.
>>
>> Note also that I went through the survey results carefully (twice) and
>> came
>> up with slightly different results than Leon, but nothing that changes the
>> shape of the results too significantly.
>>
>> Greg
>>
>> On Mon, Oct 12, 2015 at 11:15 PM, León Felipe Sánchez Ambía <
>> leonfelipe at sanchez.mx> wrote:
>>
>> Dear all,
>>>
>>> I want to thank you all for the excellent work carried in this second
>>> public comment analysis draft. Although I remained silent I followed the
>>> discussion closely and tried to capture it in some minor additions I made
>>> to this new version of our draft to be submitted to the CCWG for review.
>>>
>>> I specially thank Nigel, Niels, Tatiana, Greg, Avri, Ellen, Kavouss,
>>> David
>>> and Mathew for their work and feedback to reach this document.
>>>
>>> I encourage you to please review this version which will be submitted as
>>> our deliverable to the CCWG and I also remind you that should there be
>>> the
>>> need to make any further adjustments, we can do so anytime before having
>>> to
>>> submit a final version to be included in the next version of the CCWG’s
>>> draft proposal.
>>>
>>> Attached is a word and PDF version of this latest draft.
>>>
>>> Best regards,
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> León
>>>
>>>
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