[Ws2-hr] red line

[Greg Shatan]

Here's a redline.

On Tue, Aug 8, 2017 at 3:54 PM, Niels ten Oever <lists at nielstenoever.net>
wrote:

> Hi all,
>
> Original text:
>
> When examining its operations, ICANN the organization could also
> consider instruments such as HRIAs to assess their impact on Human
> Rights.  However, this is up to ICANN the organization to develop and
> implement. The results of such HRIAs should be reflected in ICANN’s
> annual reporting.
>
> Text proposed by me on the call:
>
> When examining its operations, ICANN the organization could consider
> using a framework like the UNGPs as well as specific instruments such as
> HRIAs to assess its impact on Human Rights, and offer remediation.
> However, it is up to ICANN the organization to decide the most
> appropriate framework and instrument to do this. The results of ICANN
> the organization's analysis should be reflected in
> ICANN’s annual reporting.
>
> I am greatly looking forward to the suggestion of the drafting team.
>
> Best,
>
> Niels
>
>
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