[CCWG-ACCT] Final Compiled Version of 2nd Draft Proposal

[Grace Abuhamad]

Thank you Greg. Part of the professional formatting involves adding page
numbers, paragraph numbers, etc. What we shared we you is just the shell
that we compiled. 

We¹ve noted your correction for the reference on Chapter 6.1. Helpful catch.
The draft will go through another round of proofreading, but this type of
catch is truly appreciated.

Best, 
Grace

From:  <accountability-cross-community-bounces at icann.org> on behalf of Greg
Shatan <gregshatanipc at gmail.com>
Date:  Sunday, August 2, 2015 at 3:37 PM
To:  Hillary Jett <hillary.jett at icann.org>
Cc:  Accountability Cross Community
<accountability-cross-community at icann.org>
Subject:  Re: [CCWG-ACCT] Final Compiled Version of 2nd Draft Proposal

Two quick comments:

1.  I note that the pages are not numbered.  This should be corrected before
it is published.
2.  On the first page of what is now Chapter 6.1, there is an incorrect
cross-reference, which could lead to considerable confusion.  (MS Word calls
this page 43.)

This is in the 4th paragraph on that page, which now reads:

It is important that before participating SOs and ACs make decisions
regarding how to vote in exercising a community power, they discuss the
matter among themselves and with each other. Section 6.2 below sets out the
CCWG-Accountability¹s proposal on how to implement a simple system to do
this, based on experience with the work of the CCWG-Accountability itself.


The cross-reference at the beginning of the second sentence should be to
Section 6.3.  (Section 6.2 is "Influence in the Community Mechanism";
Section 6.3 is "An ICANN Community Forum.")


Thanks for the fixing this!


Greg

On Sun, Aug 2, 2015 at 2:57 PM, Hillary Jett <hillary.jett at icann.org> wrote:
> Hi all,
> 
> Please find attached a Final Compiled Version of the 2nd Draft Proposal.
> 
> Each individual chapter of this document can be found on the wiki, and this
> page is the reference page for the group on this 2nd Draft Proposal:
> https://community.icann.org/pages/viewpage.action?pageId=53783460
> <https://community.icann.org/pages/viewpage.action?pageId=53783460>
> 
> This document is currently undergoing a professional design overhaul and will
> be published tomorrow as a part of the public comment launch. As a note, you
> will notice that numbering of chapters has been cleaned up.
> 
> Thanks all,
> Hillary
> 
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