[CCWG-ACCT] COMMENTS/EDITS by 17:00 UTC today - Draft statement - Frankfurt Meeting

[Robin Gross]

I would also suggest a slight rewording of this sentence in the text under "Progress" as follows:

These definitions clarify the purposes of ICANN’s accountability, which include compliance to processes and applicable laws or key principles, achieving certain levels of performance and security, and ensuring that its decisions are for the benefit of the public, not just in the interests of a particular set of stakeholders or the corporation itself. 

Thanks,
Robin


On Jan 22, 2015, at 12:17 PM, Robin Gross wrote:

> I agree with Keith on this point and see another related problem with the text (which I am only seeing now for the 1st time after the long journey home).
> 
> The document states that scope of our work is in seeing that ICANN "remains accountable" - but that is not really true.  The reason this group was formed is because the community felt ICANN was inadequately accountable today.  That is a big difference in scope.  So we such just say "ICANN is accountable" because there isn't agreement that ICANN currently is accountable as the current text implies by using the word "remains" in the first sentence.
> 
> Thank you,
> Robin
> 
> 
> On Jan 22, 2015, at 7:48 AM, Drazek, Keith wrote:
> 
>> Thanks Alice.
>>  
>> I think the statement looks good.
>>  
>> I would ask the Co-Chairs for only one small (but meaningful) edit in the following sentence. Remove the word “perceived.” I think it’s now widely accepted that the backstop role is real. If that change is problematic for anyone, then add “real or” so it becomes “real or perceived backstop.”  Regardless, it’s more than only perceived and I think that needs to be made explicit.
>>  
>> The scope of the Enhancing ICANN Accountability process is defined as ensuring that ICANN remains accountable in the absence of its historical contractual relationship with the U.S. Government, and the perceived backstop with regard to ICANN's organization-wide accountability provided by that role.
>>  
>> Thanks, Keith
>>  
>>  
>> From: accountability-cross-community-bounces at icann.org [mailto:accountability-cross-community-bounces at icann.org] On Behalf Of Alice Jansen
>> Sent: Thursday, January 22, 2015 8:08 AM
>> To: accountability-cross-community at icann.org
>> Subject: [CCWG-ACCT] COMMENTS/EDITS by 17:00 UTC today - Draft statement - Frankfurt Meeting
>>  
>> Dear all,
>> On behalf of the CCWG-Accountability Co-Chairs, please find attached a draft statement (Frankfurt – 19-20 January) for your consideration.
>> Please flag any edits and/or comments you may have by today – Thursday, 22 January - 17:00 UTC.
>> Thank you 
>> Best regards
>> Alice 
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