[Epdp-dt] EPDP Scope

[Pam Little]

Hi Keith

Many thanks to you and the small drafting team for the "final" draft. 

Because of time zone differences, I have not had an opportunity to discuss this with my RrSG councillors or RrSG members but, in the interest fo time, I have made some suggested edits and queries to the final draft. Most of them are intended to correct minor errors or add more clarity and consistency so I hope they are not controversial, except perhaps my proposed change to J2 below:

"J2) Can the obligation to provide “reasonable access” be clarified or defined reconciled with the objective of avoiding, to the extent possible, an unharmonized approach to third-party access to registration data, , without the implementation of a community-wide model for access or similar framework which takes into account at least the following elements:"

It seems to me neither the langauge in the previous draft (re fragmentation of WHOIS) nor the final draft was helpful hence my proposed change to try to make it more neutral. 

I also have a question regarding the last paragraph in the final draft:

"The EPDP Team shall respect the timelines and deliverables as outlined in Annex A and A-1 of the ICANN Bylaws and the EPDP Manual. As per the GNSO EPDP Working Group Guidelines, the EPDP Team shall develop a work plan that outlines the necessary steps and expected timing in order to achieve the milestones of the EPDP as set out in Annex A and A-1 of the ICANN Bylaws and the EPDP Manual and submit this to the GNSO Council. Any significant updates to the work plan are expected to be communicated in a timely manner to the GNSO Council with an explanation as to why the work plan needed adjustment." 

The final draft Charter has set timelines for Deliverable 2. Is the EPDP Team expected to develop a work plan for all three deliverables? 

Kind regards,

Pam
------------------------------------------------------------------
Sender:Drazek, Keith via Epdp-dt <epdp-dt at icann.org>
Sent at:2018 Jul 16 (Mon) 13:08
To:Epdp-dt at icann.org <Epdp-dt at icann.org>; marika.konings at icann.org <marika.konings at icann.org>
Subject:[Epdp-dt] EPDP Scope


Hello again everyone….
Now attached is the final draft of the EPDP WG Charter scope section for your review and our vote on the 19th.
I have attached the redline version (against the version circulate to the DT last Wednesday) and the clean version.
Thanks for your patience and for the constructive input of all parties.
Regards,
Keith
From: Drazek, Keith 
Sent: Sunday, July 15, 2018 10:28 AM
To: Drazek, Keith <kdrazek at verisign.com>
Cc: Epdp-dt at icann.org; marika.konings at icann.org
Subject: Re: [EXTERNAL] [Epdp-dt] EPDP Scope
Hi all. Please wait before reviewing. I may have jumped the gun and we may have more suggested edits incoming from NCSG.
Thanks,
Keith

 On Jul 15, 2018, at 8:44 AM, Drazek, Keith via Epdp-dt <epdp-dt at icann.org> wrote:
Hi all,
As discussed on Wednesday’s EPDP Drafting Team call, attached is the final draft of the EPDP charter scope section. 
I received a few suggested edits from Stephanie and Darcy and did my best to incorporate/address them. The small group has reviewed and agreed this is ready for approval at the 19 July Council meeting.
Thanks to everyone for your contributions to this effort.
Regards,
Keith
<Updated Scope Section 15 July 2018 -- Consolidated Edits.docx>
<Updated Scope Section 15 July 2018 -- Consolidated Edits CLEAN.docx>
_______________________________________________
 Epdp-dt mailing list
Epdp-dt at icann.org
https://mm.icann.org/mailman/listinfo/epdp-dt

-------------- next part --------------
An HTML attachment was scrubbed...
URL: <http://mm.icann.org/pipermail/epdp-dt/attachments/20180716/97ea5357/attachment-0001.html>
-------------- next part --------------
A non-text attachment was scrubbed...
Name: Updated Scope Section 15 July 2018 -- Consolidated Edits v2 CLEAN+Pam.docx
Type: application/octet-stream
Size: 42374 bytes
Desc: not available
URL: <http://mm.icann.org/pipermail/epdp-dt/attachments/20180716/97ea5357/UpdatedScopeSection15July2018--ConsolidatedEditsv2CLEANPam-0001.docx>