[Rt4-whois] Executive summary, findings and recommendations - revised

[Smith, Bill]

Read it, agree. One suggested change and a comment for a change.

1) Request changing number in the IP address section to number.
2) RFC for WHOIS is not plicy

See attached for specifics.


On Apr 28, 2012, at 4:59 AM, Emily Taylor wrote:

Dear all

Thank you Kathy for your work on combining our discussions, findings and recommendations into a single document along with the Executive Summary.

I have gone through it all now, and attach a marked up draft, which I hope does the following:

1.  I have marked as accepted all the text which I believe has been agreed by the team on our previous calls - that is the wording of findings and recommendations on strategic priority, data accuracy, most of the wording on privacy proxy (apart from last para), the common interface, and the new ones at the end on progress reporting.  I may have got this wrong, and hope that others will review carefully.

2. I have marked up new text:

- there were some sections of the old exec summary which I thought we could reintroduce since they make important points on (1) consensus building and (2) consumer trust.

- The text on strategic priority which is new, recalls our agreement on the last call.  This is basically Susan's text.  Having reviewed the whole recommendation, it makes sense (I think) to pull out some duplicate ideas (on incentives), and also to put the reporting bit at the end.

- I added a few words into Kathy's new text introducing Outreach (rec 3).  I like Kathy's text and recommend that it is accepted.

- Whole new section on Compliance.  As reported on our last call, we've had an outline in circulation for some time, but only had the opportunity to discuss in our small team yesterday.  This is our proposal, which is lifted from the larger chapter that was circulated yesterday.

- I added the WDRP text (which was quite a popular draft recommendation!) into data accuracy recommendations.  I recall from our discussions in Costa Rica that we agreed it was a bit out of place as the second recommendation, and that it fitted better as a sub-section on accuracy.  Having put in that recommendation, I saw that we had no text in the findings to anchor it.  Taking Kathy's approach, I found the paragraph in our original draft report (Compliance chapter - findings), which described the problem we perceive.

- The paragraph on data validation (drafted by James, Lynn and me) is now at the end of the findings on data accuracy, as agreed on our last call.

Otherwise, I recommend Kathy's changes are accepted (I've left them marked up so all can see and comment).

Lastly, Kathy - you asked about "de-accreditation", and my recollection is that we noted James' draft and helpful explanations on this, and agreed that we didn't need to go further or add new text into the recommendations. Again, if I've misunderstood, please shout.

All: Would be grateful for your input on this as soon as possible.  Even if it's a short e-mail saying "I read it; I agree" ;-)



Kind regards

Emily



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