[Rt4-whois] Executive summary, findings and recommendations - revised [SEC=UNCLASSIFIED]

[Kathy Kleiman]

Hi Peter, Emily and All,
I think things are looking good!
Best,
Kathy
p.s. quick note to Alice that I would be happy to work with her to 
ensure that all the embedded comments I put into the Executive Summary 
(for us) are removed in the final version.


:
>
> Hello all,
>
> Thanks to Emily, Kathy and all the others who have contributed to this 
> revised draft.
>
> I have made several comments and edits in revision mode. These are 
> primarily to:
>
> ·Comment on Emily's and Kathy's discussion about whether to reinstate 
> text from the first draft -- in general, I agree to reinstating the 
> relevant text, but can also live with some minor softening in places
>
> ·Seek some clarification on the outreach recommendation (#3). In 
> short, I strongly support the sentiment, and make some comments about 
> clarifying/sharpening the recommendation. I have not offered alternate 
> text for this one, as I'm not sure I fully understand the nuances, so 
> I'll look for others to comment.
>
> ·Add the additional sub-part to the compliance recommendation(#4) that 
> I circulated earlier, and which to date only Emily has commented on 
> and supported
>
> ·Edit the privacy/proxy text, to remove the reference to 'legitimate' 
> in the findings, and more substantively to offer a draft alternative 
> to the contentious last paragraph in the recommendation (#10)
>
> ·Add an 'awareness raising' component to the data access 
> recommendation (#11)
>
> ·(Re)offer alternative wording for the status reports recommendation 
> (#15) to clarify the timing and expectations
>
> I hope this helps.
>
> Cheers,
>
> Peter
>
> PS. I have just seen Alice's email with a newer version of the 
> Executive Summary, which includes the data validation text, so I 
> apologise for making extra work by having made all my comments in the 
> earlier version!
>
> *From:*rt4-whois-bounces at icann.org 
> [mailto:rt4-whois-bounces at icann.org] *On Behalf Of *Emily Taylor
> *Sent:* Saturday, 28 April 2012 9:59 PM
> *To:* rt4-whois at icann.org
> *Subject:* [Rt4-whois] Executive summary, findings and recommendations 
> - revised
>
> Dear all
>
>
> Thank you Kathy for your work on combining our discussions, findings 
> and recommendations into a single document along with the Executive 
> Summary.
>
> I have gone through it all now, and attach a marked up draft, which I 
> hope does the following:
>
> 1.  I have marked as accepted all the text which I believe has been 
> agreed by the team on our previous calls - that is the wording of 
> findings and recommendations on strategic priority, data accuracy, 
> most of the wording on privacy proxy (apart from last para), the 
> common interface, and the new ones at the end on progress reporting. 
>  I may have got this wrong, and hope that others will review carefully.
>
> 2. I have marked up new text:
>
> - there were some sections of the old exec summary which I thought we 
> could reintroduce since they make important points on (1) consensus 
> building and (2) consumer trust.
>
> - The text on strategic priority which is new, recalls our agreement 
> on the last call.  This is basically Susan's text.  Having reviewed 
> the whole recommendation, it makes sense (I think) to pull out some 
> duplicate ideas (on incentives), and also to put the reporting bit at 
> the end.
>
> - I added a few words into Kathy's new text introducing Outreach (rec 
> 3).  I like Kathy's text and recommend that it is accepted.
>
> - Whole new section on Compliance.  As reported on our last call, 
> we've had an outline in circulation for some time, but only had the 
> opportunity to discuss in our small team yesterday.  This is our 
> proposal, which is lifted from the larger chapter that was circulated 
> yesterday.
>
> - I added the WDRP text (which was quite a popular draft 
> recommendation!) into data accuracy recommendations.  I recall from 
> our discussions in Costa Rica that we agreed it was a bit out of place 
> as the second recommendation, and that it fitted better as a 
> sub-section on accuracy.  Having put in that recommendation, I saw 
> that we had no text in the findings to anchor it.  Taking Kathy's 
> approach, I found the paragraph in our original draft report 
> (Compliance chapter - findings), which described the problem we perceive.
>
> - The paragraph on data validation (drafted by James, Lynn and me) is 
> now at the end of the findings on data accuracy, as agreed on our last 
> call.
>
> Otherwise, I recommend Kathy's changes are accepted (I've left them 
> marked up so all can see and comment).
>
> Lastly, Kathy - you asked about "de-accreditation", and my 
> recollection is that we noted James' draft and helpful explanations on 
> this, and agreed that we didn't need to go further or add new text 
> into the recommendations. Again, if I've misunderstood, please shout.
>
> All: Would be grateful for your input on this as soon as possible. 
>  Even if it's a short e-mail saying "I read it; I agree" ;-)
>
> Kind regards
>
>
> Emily
>
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