[cc-humanrights] Draft presentations GAC & Constituencies

[Avri Doria]

Hi,

I have question, is this from Article 19 or the WP?  Same for the report.

I think that cross WP materials should perhaps list thanks at the end to
those who paid for the work, but it makes me uncomfortable to see it
used as if they are the ones creating the work.

I also think that if any authors is listed, all of the
authors/contributors should be listed.

Just saying

avri




On 21-Jun-15 15:18, Niels ten Oever wrote:
> Thanks you Stephanie and the others that commented on the Skype channel,
> please find the updated version attached.
>
> Best,
>
> Niels
>
> Niels ten Oever
> Head of Digital
>
> Article 19
> www.article19.org
>
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> On 06/21/2015 01:33 PM, Stephanie Perrin wrote:
>> Since it is PDFed, I cannot edit.  Here are my Comments:
>> 1.  ON the title page it would be great if you could identify yourself
>> as NCSG.
>> 2.  The fine print is way, way too small.  The ownership/authorship of
>> those reports must be more prominent, and at least legible.
>> Title or topic of report in a couple of words would be helpful,
>> particularly to non-english speakers
>> 5.  Get rid of the blank space, put an apostrophe in ICANN's
>> Since we will be referring to the Ruggies principles, it might be good
>> to add that to this slide (bullet one) again, to help folks follow the
>> discussion better.
>> 6.  I am a little worried that this last slide looks too
>> ambitious.....but if the group feels our community is ready for it, damn
>> the torpedoes.  IMHO, we are not ready yet....
>> Thanks Niels for the opportunity to comment!
>> Stephanie
>> On 2015-06-21 11:41, Niels ten Oever wrote:
>>> Hi all,
>>>
>>> I've been asked to give an overview of our CCWP work at the GAC WG and
>>> at several constituencies, for this I made a draft presentation. Please
>>> find it attached. Looking forward to hear what you think.
>>>
>>> The presentations should take a maximum of 15 minutes, including Q&A, so
>>> I'd like to keep it short. Let me know if you thing something is missing
>>> or should be reformulated.
>>>
>>> I'll also work on a presentation of the report for Wednesdays session, I
>>> will send that to you when it's ready for comments.
>>>
>>> Looking forward to hear from you.
>>>
>>> Best,
>>>
>>> Niels
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>>
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