[RDS-WHOIS2-RT-Leadership_Staff] Nearly final report

[Jean-Baptiste Deroulez]

Dear Alan



Saw your message and reviewed the report. Thank you for addressing my previous comments.



Please find attached the latest version, including one edition for your review.



Please note that I have inserted the latest version of the fact sheet (through 28 February 2019) which is pending approval from Susan (see previous email sent to leadership list).



A few comments on your to-do list:



- Redo the Table of Contents once everything else is done - DONE

- Please do a final review looking for orphan headings and such. I

noticed 3.4.2 but there may be others. - DONE

- We seem to use Finding: and Findings: I suspect they should all be

Findings: but perhaps some of them are really singular. I'll leave that to you. - DONE

- The table on page 54/55 needs the title row repeated on the 2nd page. – DONE (also on other tables for clarity and consisentency)

- The same for the table in 3.7.2 - DONE

- Is blank page 148 intentional? And 172. (perhaps there to get a

heading on the right side) – Did not see blank pages?

- Appendix D needs to be inserted. – DONE (approval needed from Susan on fact sheets)

- Appendix F needs to be inserted or pointed to. - DONE

- Stephanie's statement which I hope is forthcoming. – RECEIVED AND INSERTED



Kind regards,

Jean-Baptiste



On 3/9/19, 4:19 PM, "RDS-WHOIS2-RT-Leadership_Staff on behalf of Alan Greenberg" <rds-whois2-rt-leadership_staff-bounces at icann.org on behalf of alan.greenberg at mcgill.ca> wrote:



    Jean-Baptiste,



    I have:



    1. Accepted the various changes in v05.



    2. Fixed the R5.1 implementation paragraph that Jean-Batiste

    identified as being problematic.



    3. Removed the paragraph referencing GDPR in the R5.1 rationale which

    was the sticking point in getting Volker and Stephanie to support it.



    4. Ran a spelling and grammar check. Most of what it identified were

    ok, but it did catch some problems and those were fixed.



    5. Fixed the spelling of InterNIC in a few places.



    To Do:



    - Redo the Table of Contents once everything else is done

    - Please do a final review looking for orphan headings and such. I

    noticed 3.4.2 but there may be others.

    - We seem to use Finding: and Findings: I suspect they should all be

    Findings: but perhaps some of them are really singular. I'll leave that to you.

    - The table on page 54/55 needs the title row repeated on the 2nd page.

    - The same for the table in 3.7.2

    - Is blank page 148 intentional? And 172. (perhaps there to get a

    heading on the right side)

    - Appendix D needs to be inserted.

    - Appendix F needs to be inserted or pointed to.

    - Stephanie's statement which I hope is forthcoming.



    That's about as much as I could find.



    Alan
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