[WP1] Content Draft with Comments and Tracked Changes - next (Final) draft out 0300 Friday UTC

[Steve DelBianco]

Wonderful turnaround, Jordan.  Two edits:

In the AoC section, page 7, just before 6.6.1.   Avri will probably say it better than me, but we need to add this sentiment:

When the community is satisfied that AoC commitments and period reviews are properly reflected in ICANN’s bylaws, we recommend a cancelation of the AoC by mutual agreement of ICANN and NTIA.

In the AoC section 6.6.1, page 9, AoC section 8, we do not need to retain the yellow highlighted text “Would B need to be put in a fundamental bylaw?”  Avri added that as a question, but I did not hear anyone call for that.


From: Jordan Carter
Date: Thursday, April 16, 2015 at 5:10 PM
To: "wp1 at icann.org<mailto:wp1 at icann.org>"
Subject: [WP1] Content Draft with Comments and Tracked Changes - next (Final) draft out 0300 Friday UTC

Hi eveyone

Thanks for the call just now.

Attached is the working document.

Please review if you are inclined. If you have specific comments please raise them ON THE LIST rather than just to me, so anyone else can react, and I will take into account any comments on THIS version received by 0200 UTC on Friday.

I will take these comments, clean the document up, do what I can in the time available to add things like the tables / options for votes, and then...

... and then circulate a nice clean Final Draft for you (and a mark up showing what has changed from V3) at around 0300 UTC on Friday.

Then you will have 21h to make any final comments or thoughts.

Then, I'll make final adjustments and send it to the co-chairs and staff, or wherever they tell us to send it, for incorporation in the full document.

This isn't perfect work folks, but it's pretty darn good given the pace at which we are working.  Thank you for all the effort represented here.

cheers
Jordan

--
Jordan Carter

Chief Executive
InternetNZ

04 495 2118 (office) | +64 21 442 649 (mob)
jordan at internetnz.net.nz<mailto:jordan at internetnz.net.nz>
Skype: jordancarter

A better world through a better Internet

-------------- next part --------------
An HTML attachment was scrubbed...
URL: <http://mm.icann.org/pipermail/wp1/attachments/20150416/9428c221/attachment-0001.html>