[Gac-gnso-cg] version 7 of the charter - reflecting the last editson today's call

[CARVELL, Mark]

Dear Marika and Manal

Rather than "at the end stage", perhaps " in the final stage" is preferable as the more usual turn of phrase.  I thought "at a very late stage" was ok because it effectively conveys a useful emphasis of near finality and "late" has simply the temporal meaning here: as in "they won the match with a late goal" it does not infer a delay or tardiness.

Best regards

Mark


From: gac-gnso-cg-bounces at icann.org [mailto:gac-gnso-cg-bounces at icann.org] On Behalf Of Manal Ismail
Sent: 29 January 2014 11:10
To: Marika Konings; Mike O'Connor; GAC-GNSO-CG at icann.org
Subject: Re: [Gac-gnso-cg] version 7 of the charter - reflecting the last editson today's call

Thanks Marika .. I see your point and personally, I'm fine with replacing 'at a very late stage' by 'at the end' ..
For the sake of the charter, I believe the more we stick to facts, rather than opinions, the easier we reach consensus ..
Kind Regards
--Manal

From: Marika Konings [mailto:marika.konings at icann.org]
Sent: Wednesday, January 29, 2014 12:45 PM
To: Manal Ismail; Mike O'Connor; GAC-GNSO-CG at icann.org<mailto:GAC-GNSO-CG at icann.org>
Subject: Re: [Gac-gnso-cg] version 7 of the charter - reflecting the last editson today's call

All,

If I may make another suggestion for a change - could we use 'at the end' instead of 'at a very late stage' so that the sentence as reworded by Manal would read 'A timing difficulty arises because the Board seeks GAC advice only when the GNSO PDP reaches the Board at the end stage of the GNSO policy-deliberation process'. Very late stage seems to imply that it should have reached the Board earlier but it didn't, while at the end stage reflects the reality of the current PDP (the Board only gets involved at the end stage of the process).

Thanks,

Marika

From: Manal Ismail <manal at tra.gov.eg<mailto:manal at tra.gov.eg>>
Date: Wednesday 29 January 2014 11:14
To: Mike O'Connor <mike at haven2.com<mailto:mike at haven2.com>>, "GAC-GNSO-CG at icann.org<mailto:GAC-GNSO-CG at icann.org>" <GAC-GNSO-CG at icann.org<mailto:GAC-GNSO-CG at icann.org>>
Subject: Re: [Gac-gnso-cg] version 7 of the charter - reflecting the last editson today's call

Many thanks Mikey, as usual unbeatable speed :) ..

Dear All ..
I've included below the paragraph under debate for ease of reference ..
"The GAC is structured under the ICANN Bylaws to provide advice to the Board.  A timing difficulty arises because the GNSO PDP reaches the Board at a very late stage of the GNSO policy-deliberation process and it may only be at that time that the GAC turns its attention to the GNSO's work.  [Only then does the Board request GAC advice, which is an example of a process that appears to need review and improvement.]"

The sentence "and it may only be at that time that the GAC turns its attention to the GNSO's work." implies that the GAC does not know about the GNSO's work until the Board seeks advice, which is not the case ..

Hence the suggestion I did during the call was:

-       "The GAC is structured under the ICANN Bylaws to provide advice to the Board.  A timing difficulty arises because the Board seeks GAC advice only when the GNSO PDP reaches the Board at a very late stage of the GNSO policy-deliberation process."

I also believe this serves the purpose:

-       "The GAC is structured under the ICANN Bylaws to provide advice to the Board.  The GNSO PDP reaches the Board at a very late stage of the GNSO policy-deliberation process. A timing difficulty arises when the Board then seeks GAC advice because only at that time that the GNSO gets to know about GAC concerns. [A process that appears to need review and improvement.]

For me, the sentence between square brackets is not indicated but does not harm the meaning ..
Looking forward to hearing what others think ..

Kind Regards
--Manal

From: gac-gnso-cg-bounces at icann.org<mailto:gac-gnso-cg-bounces at icann.org> [mailto:gac-gnso-cg-bounces at icann.org] On Behalf Of Mike O'Connor
Sent: Tuesday, January 28, 2014 5:03 PM
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Subject: [Gac-gnso-cg] version 7 of the charter - reflecting the last editson today's call


here's the version of the draft

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